Percentage of people aged 5 to 14
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The data shows the percentage of 5 to 14 year olds and the 1. procentage of those over 60 from 1985 to 2000 in a selection of countries.
Australia had the lowest percentage of over 60s yet the highest of children between 5 and 14 from 1995 to 2000. Earlier, both Ireland and Turkey had higher percentages of 5 to 14 year olds. Although higher by 1 or 2%, Australia had a similar trend to Denmark.
In 1985, Germany 2. has the highest percentage of over 60s while at the same time they also had the lowest percentage of minors 3. , In 1995 and 2000, Germany remained the lowest with the exception of Italy at 9 and 10%.
From 1990 to 1995, there was an inverse correlation between the percentage of children and people over 60 in the UK. At 4. 13%, it had the second lowest percentage of 5. kids in 1985 but the second highest at 13% in 2000; no data was given for Turkey.
Overall, Germany had similar trends to Australia for over 60s and the UK for children.
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