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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
New neighbours have recently moved in, but they are making a lot of noise at night while you are preparing for your exams. Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter:
- explain that they are preventing you from studying well
- suggest what they can do to improve the situation
- tell them when you will have completed your studies
Write at least 150 words.
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear………………………
Start with ‘Dear….’ I am writing this letter to draw your attention to a situation that has been caused by you ‘which is affecting me’ would me more appropriate. I am your neighbour, living just beside you. I am currenty ‘currently’ in the final year of my Masters of Acountancy ‘Accountancy’, and currently preparing for final ‘my final’ exam. But ‘However’ recently I can not concentrate ‘have not been able to concentrate’ on my studies because you are playing your music player all the time ‘very often’ (all the time is too strong) until late night ‘at night’. Due to that ‘that,’ (comma) I am facing difficulties to focus ‘focussing’ on exam preparation and that is giving me some tension ‘causing some stress’ is more common. As I am going to university and have job ‘am working’ as well during day times, I only get little ‘a little’ or ‘limited’ time to study for my exam, and I cannot use my precious time to study due to the music.
I would appriciate ‘appreciate’ it very much, if you could try to avoid playing music late at night or during the night, so I can concentrate on my subjects. You can play music daytimes as no one remain ‘is’ at home during office times in our appartment ‘apartment’.
I will be very thankful to you if you can understand my problem and stop the interruption which is spoiling my career this is too strong – ‘disturbing my studies’.
Best Wishes,
John Morgan
(197 words)
Comments:
Although only a minor point, the instructions state that the letter should begin ‘Dear….’ so this should be included.
There are a considerable number of spelling errors, as well as shorter sentences that would have been better if they were combined with more academic linking words.
There are errors with basic grammar (‘As I am going my university ‘) and some sentences need to be reorganised to avoid repetition or uncommon constructions (‘draw your attention to a situation that has been caused by you’).
However, despite being a little longer than recommended, the writer has covered the main points and organised ideas into a logical sequence of paragraphs.